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Old 08-31-2013, 03:30 AM   #7
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A lot of things said in the first verse, with very little writing. And in the second as well. I can tell who's both. Though what @dull boy said is true. This doesn't really seem to be the case here. I connected with both. Very good collab guys! And if anybody's reading, we're all assuming serpent 1st verse, and copypat is the second verse. Well, we know. The cadence is there.

I also noticed a typo in copypats verse. Or maybe he meant it to be like that?

"a long day of shit, what a wrong way live" Maybe you meant to add "wrong way TO live" or wrong way liveD? Not sure. But it sounds odd, and incorrect if left that way. Just tiny nitpickings. Both were cool. I just think if certain divulged more, he'd be saying less, and the verse was perfect the way it was. Your styles actually sort of complimented each other, certain - technical and on par with surroundings. And Copypat a sort of erratic type of writing, and goes with the flow.
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