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Brain Thief · 08-29-2013, 10:29 PM

Not bad I guess, it was pretty amateur at parts

I murder unheard of nerds with no purpose for their words
Lack of service smack the servants this is enders game an your the thirds!

Not bad, the second is stretched a little. The internal isn't that bad

All the white an black victims let the gat an the knife lift em
The blat an blat hit em in the back THEN I spat! venom!

Ehhhhh, not feeling it man. Technically it's weak and the concept isn't being handled with originality. If that's an attempt at a multie then it's a bit of a reach

Morbid whorish actions, of course there's more ta fathom,
Breakin apart your factions till 4 horsemen are laughin at em.
You piece of shit bitches, I'll eat your wife an your kids
(vicious)
No remorse, this is war! I'm rippin pussies and no stitches!

Unimaginative, technically I guess it's not bad.

Am I crazy? Maybe, whipping a lifted 'cedes
Fuckin worlds up, I'm the priest an your the babies.

Cmon son, I'm just going to point out wack bars like this. It's the only way you're going to get better

I don't hit licks I split wigs 380 splittin Adams,
Fuck the gay shit you'll see shades of gray shit when I'm spittin/before I wack em!

This line is just a little gay

In the back of the lac hidden,
Im sinnin n its a fact.
Im twistin up blunts, your strugglin ta cop a sack.

Not too bad, although it's a single syllable rhyme

Hustlin ain't an issue you pansies need a tissue or gun
You can dry your eyes wit the same one I used ta dry my cum.
Im done fuckin flexin the best in the text section
Using gats ta splatter standards an BLLAATT! ta get attention!

Not a bad finisher, the first two bars are pretty uninspired though

Very amateurish but with practice you could do well

08-29-2013, 10:29 PM	#13
Brain Thief Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 23 Rep Power: 36	Not bad I guess, it was pretty amateur at parts I murder unheard of nerds with no purpose for their words Lack of service smack the servants this is enders game an your the thirds! Not bad, the second is stretched a little. The internal isn't that bad All the white an black victims let the gat an the knife lift em The blat an blat hit em in the back THEN I spat! venom! Ehhhhh, not feeling it man. Technically it's weak and the concept isn't being handled with originality. If that's an attempt at a multie then it's a bit of a reach Morbid whorish actions, of course there's more ta fathom, Breakin apart your factions till 4 horsemen are laughin at em. You piece of shit bitches, I'll eat your wife an your kids (vicious) No remorse, this is war! I'm rippin pussies and no stitches! Unimaginative, technically I guess it's not bad. Am I crazy? Maybe, whipping a lifted 'cedes Fuckin worlds up, I'm the priest an your the babies. Cmon son, I'm just going to point out wack bars like this. It's the only way you're going to get better I don't hit licks I split wigs 380 splittin Adams, Fuck the gay shit you'll see shades of gray shit when I'm spittin/before I wack em! This line is just a little gay In the back of the lac hidden, Im sinnin n its a fact. Im twistin up blunts, your strugglin ta cop a sack. Not too bad, although it's a single syllable rhyme Hustlin ain't an issue you pansies need a tissue or gun You can dry your eyes wit the same one I used ta dry my cum. Im done fuckin flexin the best in the text section Using gats ta splatter standards an BLLAATT! ta get attention! Not a bad finisher, the first two bars are pretty uninspired though Very amateurish but with practice you could do well Last edited by Brain Thief; 08-29-2013 at 10:44 PM.