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Old 08-28-2013, 10:35 PM   #9
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Take a step into the concrete jungle, offbeat hustle
where lyricism is deep, but that shit got me troubled
got me lost, between jealousy like it's honesty's body double

^^That's raw...if your whole verse was like that this would be straight fire, it just so happens that I thought what came after the section I quoted was not that great...average at best when compared to the way you opened, still an enjoyable read nonetheless.

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