You have a rhyming ability, which is good. If you want me to give you feedback on everything? I don't know.
I don't really give feedback on an audio piece, but I guess I was listening to the lyrics and try to convey and translate in a lyrical, text-read form. You have a bit of everything, but not much of it. I feel you were trying to rhyme more than actually convey a certain meaning. Well you conveyed a meaning, definitely, you had a lot of psychy, deep, space babble blah blah. Was cool. Liked it! But I felt it was more rappy, than actual just trying to tell a story.
The beat was ok, I don't really listen to rap/spoken-word stuff often.
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