Pent uP:
Hey man, I gotta say I enjoyed it but in all honesty you didn't rhyme enough and felt like you missed a lot of pieces to the puzzle, even though it's constrained I feel like I couldn't even follow.
Innovator:
Very metaphysical and contrasting language you used; I enjoyed every piece of your 'piece' much better then punt'ups so I only have compliments for you lyrics. I would recommend however that you restrain from reacurring metaphors like.
judgment is a deceit.
mocking the seas and all you see of it.
deaf to the bees humming.
peddles pollinated with gods scent.
devils and demon themes.
bed that's molding
depth you hold your soul in.
I feel like you were very on top with the scheme but couldn't address more then 1 aspect of your topic.
V/Innovator
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