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Old 08-21-2013, 10:51 PM   #6
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Hip Hop slang with pieces like this comes off as corny, imo. If I could offer any criticism it would be to say that sometimes the rhythm seems slightly off, or like you could trim/add a word, or change some wording to make things seem less simplistic sounding.

And yes, it 'tis. And yeah, you should read it, if you're into reading and what not. This reminded me of it.
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