i feel like you might have some good ideas, at times, and shitz that will spark interest, but generally... your delivery/execution is mighty unpolished. unnatural. i mean i read 'harming as glass' and just thought to myself... eh. you better of not forcing that rhyme there and developing ur expression, instead. think that could be said for a lot of your verse. there are some good ideas, though. atm i can't get with them.
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