Remember reading this when you first posted it, a very interesting read. The large list of references all carried a tone giving what I'd call a dark and mysterious feel to the verse. Nearly every line was structured nicely, including solid internals and smooth transitions. One line stood out to me as being slightly weaker then the rest in terms of structure. "a genesis as a testament to the book of revelations embracing Baal's revival" Although it had the two internals in there, it seemed more like prose then rhyme; too much going on or something. Nothing major at all, didn't take away from the verse, but if I had to dig for a criticism, that would be it. Aside from that, content was delicious and I enjoyed reading it this time around as much as the first.
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