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Old 08-19-2013, 09:59 AM   #7
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DJ Khaled’s wretched remains hang from my jaws like “WE DA BEST… as a light meal.”

^^Lol.

This isn’t a joke - I promise you the longitude will world trade center demolish you
Why worry about the smoke of trench war, what about the vaunted fumes of solitude?

^^Nice.

Welcome to the demon lodging of sunken statutes
You’ll look forward to seeing zombies over my seething body coming at you
Fuck Twilight, church & Bieber. I thrive at nightlife, worked at Keibler's
During Berlin Easters, holding your organs over the burning ether
Bent over the bleeding parchment, breathing, pardon the endlessness
The universe starts to expand, as pupils roll back, like Stephen Hawking’s apprentices

^^Favorite section.

This was good, not as lengthy as your other pieces but you packed alot in here.Some really slick imagery in places and I liked the content as a whole...you also kept a consistent rhyme scheme thru-out to echo what Serpent said...nice shit V.

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