Utmost-
I liked the attitude and swag in the tone of the verse and it had some charisma but no only line stood out to me. Also, I couldn't catch the foe at all. It felt mad choppy...I know there were multis but they weren't used very well.
Rawn-
When I first started reading I thought you were going to lose. But the second half of your verse was very good. The whole verse flowed well and had multis but content wise it really picked up in the second part.
I'm going with Rawn. Just a more enjoyable, cleaner verse.
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