truth.
I suspected it was those damn Illuminanti. Write up was a poster for the Quaker Oats box. You know the patriot dude? Cream of wheat farina box? Pretty sure it's the quaker oats guy. You rhymed this in a wigged out fashion, so I will not scrutinize your nursery style. The line 'At the time it sounded good' was a clear contrast from patriot to pedestrian writers voice, giving you some much needed depth. Short verse ended rather abruptly for me but your usage of font/spacing created a bigger body of work. ''Less is more'' but ultimately you fell short of complete tyrany
Word.
Simple verse in terms of the entire spectrum verses are judged on; lyricism, imagery, flow, emotion content etc etc etc.etc. Once about halfway through I had to adapt a Eminem delivery style flow to the verse from the song 'run rabbit run' to get through the rather simple stanza. When I did this it helped me coast through a otherwise underwhelming write up. You have a knack for smooth transitions - from line to line, it was very poetic. good message all in all.
overall. Intriguingly enough, I have altered my vote. The general vagueness and star spangled simplicity of Word's write up was on some Pac shit.
vote - WORD
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