V
great rhyming m dude..great story aswell. it had some suspense and little bit of thrills
in nature lol..it was cool to feel that while I read your words. thought the progression of the story was dope and to be honest I didn't espect the ending..it was cool nice little surprise the end for me...good writing...one thing tho..felt like the ending lacked more detail...good story building up to it...taking nothing away, just pointing out something I saw. good shit man.
Word
I like the picture you painted...thought the story was broken down into some dope sections..like at he beginning you talk about whats holding us back and what there doing to hold us back..you paint a picture of lost hope and despair..and then you start wrting about how we need to take our lives back and fight back for whats right....and with that the piece goes from dark to light...a new hope is born type of stuff...great writing.
got Word on this I thought his piece captured my attention more. V wrote a dope piece as well just felt Word gave me more to chew on...great battle fellas.
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