/v pent up - descriptive. extremely descriptive. i really enjoy your pieces when you go full story mode. this is off the chain. you painted the scene well, laid everything out.. went through all the motions well, and left me hanging. yet, i'm still satisfied. excellent piece. speaks for itself. nice drop.
adonis - i enjoyed your approach, and think it was well executed. although you have good content, a great approach, and nailed the topic ( no pun intended, really) .. a couple phrases were there i must shake a stern finger at. given the seriousness of your topic. for instance,
"I mean God Damn! Every action has a reaction,"
i get it, but against your opponents verse, for comparison, i took a step back and wasn't able to be as involved with the piece. i couldn't get lost in it, as if i wasn't comfortable with the voice you narrated with. no offense. it's good. just..
"this art's my constant, restraint in notes,"
to talk about yourself while doing a story of -the- Jesus Christ, well. that's hard to chew on for me buddy. keep at it though. you almost pulled it off.
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