Pancake, you're entire verse was excellence. the flow was great fire, the narration was to notch, the character build was so good it pulled me into the story and your details put it all together in great fashion. the character having aspergers made the focus really come to light with the ocd moments in court and that brought a lot of original color to this verse that made it breezy to read and entertaining to follow. your writers voice was educated as well as insane which is always a great mix. needless to say, I enjoyed this.
Objective, your verse was very precise and have the details of a person reviewing the facts of their trail, which was a great aspect in this. gnite had some cool points and some basic ones as well. I thought there could of been more passion expressed in this by a guy who's basically innocent and it's in court about to be presumed guilty. the details of the other characters kind of outshined the details of his innocence, which from a first hand perspective is kinda odd. I liked a lot of this and it read like an episode of law and order. I could even hear the sound effect noise in sequences of the case details... lol. nice verse
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