im gonna go ahead and say this was an insane battle. you guys didn't disappoint. I was really impressed with both verses.
story- ur underrated man. plain and simple. I think you got caught up in some non topical battles and didn't look so good but dude you could write. I like your style alot. flows like an audio piece almost. which I appreciate. this verse was a little vague in the beginning. like I didn't really know what the fuck I was reading about. I caught on halfway through. the rhyme scheme was sick man. the story turned out to be really twisted and interesting. I just kinda lacked emotion. overall a dope verse.
bryan- your scheme started off a little slow but it progressively got more complex. I have to say the story you told was definitely engaging. and to have a big corporation like mcdonalds buy farmer macdonalds land was a great twist. it had alot of irony. a great writing device that grabbed a hold of the reader here.
picking a winner seems a little ridiculous because they were both really well written but I have to.
im gonna go with Lars in what was a brawl. storyteller I was impressed dude. but I think you might have gotten a little too caught up with rhyme scheme. iono. sick verse though. I would be proud of it. I just found bb more entertaining.
vote - brian bryan
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