sup mike, your rhymes seemed pretty flat here compared to what ive read from you and what i was expecting. gotta really show off the flow in this typa stuff. content was alright but nothing too flash nor enough to account for the flow this piece lacked
sik, really solid content and consistent rhyme scheme throughout. only thing i didnt like was how cookie cutter your scheme was, extending the rhyme scheme past two lines at least a few times in the verse would make the scheme less predictable. nice verse tho
+1 Sik
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