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Old 08-16-2013, 05:38 PM   #12
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Certain serpent. your verse was very well put together and each sequence built the story up to the finale of a lil Nazi. the flow read superb and the details of each part was graphic and I liked that. this was kind of an easy topic, but you put your own spin on it. the way you built it with the four sequences of events was clever and made the verse stronger and easier to follow

Innovator, your storyline was cool and the details of the sniper were nice too. the tone you set for this verse made it strong and while there some nice moments of flow, a lot of the rhymes were very basic, which makes fit a slightly rougher read. Your take on the topic ess eau to follow though and that helped.


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