[Lost in Thought]

Edgar Allan's God was that raven, God's just a deja entendu-
Stay up-lifting the bottle, baby. Cradle half-full bottles of gray goose

-line had some swagger to it, and a relation to the baby and the drinking was nice also

Are y'all even aware youre misquoting the whole status quo?
As self-image aware as non-problem kids can sadly go.

-liked how the first line went second line could have been worded different i think, but overall a good concept

You already know that I'm there: been caught on it, i'm all rhombus,
She's a box-office swan song, she's diving deep,
Meeting me and leaning on this boxed product,
More'n often talks nonsensically to me. Wanna isosceles her angles,

-liked the play with geometry in here

On and on, some-body please, explain her plot synopses aren't all impossibly deep.
I catch more feelings for Poes in Zelda, hella bastardized types of youth,
than Bella Don of self-shotty prodigies, gone cracked and try to find the booze,

-liked the first two alot, good flow, and rhyme scheem switching thru out, i was kinda lost at first part of last line, not that its bad i just think i dont have the knowlege to understand it. nt sure who bella don is. liked hwo it ended tho alot

Maya, I missed all our sopping sheets... as in toss the script.
Shnopps and peach, you shot some speech,
Cops and shit, stopped and geeked,
Not all these odysseyes follow proper plots like prophecies

-this one overall had a good concept and multi's and flow. i feel the third line could be changed tho didnt like it much, but like i said before could be from a lack of understsandin.







I abided by finite laws; sights set on Dawkin's approved delusional wisdom
I'll tell you what. 'Honesty is the best policy' got me landed in vitruvian prison

-overal a great couplett. good vocab and concept/flow. came off well

slurred words perturbed, exchanged with a heavily chlorinated valkryie
My passive genes didn't convince Cathleen to go out for decaf with me

-felt personal here. liked the emotion behind it.

Mistletoe prickling again. Breast milk sweet, but why the ruthless haste?
if Bora Bora Bora bores her on a movie date
I couldn't splooge a grape, unless this was truly fate or just an ill gimmick
Peeling back a chilled Guiness, wishing I could still finish
She's a lollipop guild tenant, it ain't a wasteland if there's a milf in it

-like i said seems personal here too liked the second line alot and the fourth. definatly made this second connect and go well.

drunk, pasted, trudging - too bad Desire's interlaced with Glutton
I proudly declared as if it were an ancient custom:
'You don't have to be a baker for me to taste your muffins."

-just seemed dirtly lol and liked it. good way to end it broski