Wow, insane match-up right here. Both verses entertaining and on some next elvel shit. Kudos to both.
Pancake... I've said it before, but I dig your ability to use subtle touches to inject so much interiority into your character. The Aspergers angle was, I mean, genius. And the ability to carry it out throughout and tie back in things like Captain Kirk and the mohagany/oak thing really made it believable. Here you have this feeble-minded narrator, and when you unleashed the actual killing scene it made it that much more haunting. You have a sick knack to get inside characters' heads and you pulled it off again. Brilliant drop.
Objective, like BB said, you went the fuck in this week.
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He was so mesmerized and stunned at her beauty he left her there guessin',
what could'a been a nice opening line turned to a creepy impression.
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liked this line, says so much about the interaction without needing to use dialogue. Nicely done. I was really hooked up your story from the mind of your character... how he schemed to do good, but ended up on the wrong end of the stick. I was stuck a little on why the guy admitted to the murder... it didn't seem that realistic to me.
Overall, I just think Pancake had a deeper concept, structure and more complexity.. there was a lot of moving pieces in his drop and they worked together seamlessly. Objective had a dope, solid drop, but Cake had those few extra layers to swing it in his favor.
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