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Old 08-15-2013, 09:10 PM   #8
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Innovators verse didn't have the rhyme complexity his opponent did and didn't make up for it enough in content. I enjoyed the looping twist at the end, I did something similiar in an OM I just dropped. Biggest criticism would be rhyme scheme here, it's always something you can elevate on. You got a firm hold of content just gotta find different and more innovative (lol) ways of laying it out brotha!

Certain, nice drop fammoooo. Consistent with them schemes, but I really enjoyed how you laid this verse out. 4 stanzas, each of which with a hook, letting the reader know whats about to go down, then some really solid execution. Really dope look on this topic, liked the read sir.

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