ya cool battle. very similar approaches here. which makes it easier to vote on in many ways. comparing apples to apples.
certain - the rhyme scheme was strong in most spots. a few not so much. but that was a very rare hiccup that I spotted maybe a couple times throughout. I liked the progression that was made. and I liked how you eased into it. after the first stanza I still wasn't aware it was a soldier. then by the second I realized this and by the third I realized that it was a Nazi soldier. felt like I was unlocking more and more as I went on which kept me engaged. well done.
inno - good shit. I liked the verse. a couple of the end rhymes were not perfect. but really fuck perfection. I wish you used more multis, a verse like this could have been so much better with them. and when you do use them it works out well. cool cyclical cycle of a story here.
overall - both wrote about soldiers. both had good stories. I was more engaged by CS story. found it more interesting. and his mechanics were better too so even though this was close I got
vote - CS
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