Very well executed especially since it's not a style you have the most confidence with. I really works for you and I hope you integrate it into your writing. Very very nice rhyme scheme, high level of complexity, impressively unexpected, and yet another compliment being your vivid imagery. You worded small phrases in a way that painted memorable moments in my stoned cranial cavity. Was a great, above average read, interesting blend of themes. Had flex areas however deep extended metaphors sort of gave it a storytelling vibe. Good read though, you're working yourself into a niche around here with these nice OM drops.
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