Word- nice mechanics and very simple approach but no flare and real deep creativity just straight like you wrote the tips off the book nah mean. you stuck with the scripture of simple placing of plot climax and ending ya know.... you gotta switch shit around take a angle than none has seen or none has pulled off and do it. ya know RISK... anyways the emotion was the highlight of the whole verse.... everything else i couldnt really dig and get into... but you got great potential man...
Veritas- your verse wasnt the shit or the bomb but you did enough to set a standard and deliver with that accord and approach. you handled the topic well im just glad that you got to pull it with a different direction and took it for the story route which is the same thing i did and such but content was ok..... and delivery needs some work though....
anyways MVGT: Veritas
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