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Yey, this was sick. A must read for new textees and rhyme writers alike to take this in and watch what you do here. At first, you set the conceptual tone, get warmed up and then jump into a solid set of circumstantial evidence to support your claims for the characters and their many spiritual vibrations. Your style is very easy to read, fluid, and you can attack a topic accurately without becoming overtaken by miscellaneous abstractions, or getting off the path. I like that you take a literal oatmeal approach: its brown sugar contents are consistent with what it promises on the granola cereal box: thoughtfully woven man-tales with a respectable vernacular that finds its way to numerous audiences.

Good work, oatsy.

After hours spent in her bedroom as dawn broke
My cue to exit: ghoulish echoes upstairs when her mom spoke
I'm ghost - the only traces were dust clouds unsettled by her window
Some moisture on her sleepy cheek and an impression on her pillow
remembering the still glow of the yawning sun above the palm trees
Crisp country air free falling from the mountains to a calm breeze
^This part was serene.

Keep doing you