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Old 08-13-2013, 10:53 PM   #4
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Didnt like the ending. ..too abrupt, never finished explaining anything.
Was written like a weird dream diary entry more than a verse. Lots of holes.

It was very captivating at first but I just lost me altogether at the end
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