Storyteller: First off I must give you props for how you handled the trask. That was a really creative and effective way of going at it. Well done. Your piece as a whole holds up as well and I think you might be the one that truly accomplished the task this week. Enjoyed the back'n'forth kinda shit you were doing and the message of your piece comes across easilly with a decent enough flow, nothing crazy in terms of rhymeschemes but it wasn't really needed either. Dope shit.
Patrown: Short and sweet verse for sure. I could see how it correlated with the task given as well, not as clearly as to how Storyteller executed it but it did what it was supposed to, so no points deducted there. The closure of your verse wrapped it up as well and you and Storyteller was about even when it comes to flow etc. as well.
Vote: Storyteller. Short battle, but it was still dope enough. Thought both verses was interesting and it's really cool to see how people approach the task this week. Keep it up and I'm looking forward to read more from both of ya.
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