[Objective]

Mr.J: Aiiight, I get what you're getting at but I didn't feel it. The smiley at the end seemed immature to me as well. The verse itself is too short to really give any impact as well. Kudos for trying, F for effort. I believe you could have done a lot more with this and written some pretty decent shit, sucks that you didn't. Put more thought into your verse the task given.

Veritas: This seemed rather rushed compared to the rhymeschemes in other works I've seen by you, but the shit you were saying held up. Interesting analogy and natural pace of your verse. Some mental ish in there with a few lines that reflects reality as well.

Violations against friendship are so subjective, not to mention there is two sides to every story
And your boys all got they own opinions, so the pariah often sits back on some “poor me”.
^Perfect example of what I was just talking about.

I could see the ''hypothetical collabo'' in this one, dope submission. Keep it up.

Vote: Veritas.