Mr. J.. pretty basic, the inside/outside scheme was alright off the top, but there just wasn't enough content here to satisfy.
VERITAS, cool concept and I think you did it justice subject matter wise... main critique is that it was way too wordy.. your lines started getting ridiculously long and it detracted from the content, especially since it was mono-rhymes for the most part... think you could have scaled the whole project back and had an even greater effect.
Vote, VERITAS
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