BB, this was probably the best thing I've read online in a few years my dude. Your wording, for one, was pinpoint perfect. Everything flowed together, one word to another. I felt like I was reading a piece from Blacketh or Engivale in their prime. Your rhyme scheme, another thing, was fluent. Never dumbed down, never got tongue tied, just kept a smooth consistency. The concept matter was interesting and fresh. Not a typical topic that everybody has used and not a out of this world topic that's too complex to grasp. Overall, an awesome piece.
Rawn, this was kinda too simple man. I enjoyed the idea and the approach. But your wording and your rhyme scheme kinda lost my interest about halfway in. It was nowhere near BB's technical level this week and I don't entirely blame you after reading his piece. It would've been difficult for anybody to touch this week. I dunno dude, I liked what you were aiming for just didn't think the journey itself was enough.
Vote Brian, better overall piece.
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