Objective, took me awhile to get into this piece. I think it's the language you used. (Wording, flow, attitude ect.) The constant pauses after what seemed like every 2-3 words. It seemed like for the vast majority of your piece you were trying some narration style and in honesty it really didn't click with me. I've read some dope pieces by you which is one of the reasons this one disappointed me because I just couldn't really sink into it. The idea was cool, a bit too abstract for my taste personally. But hey! To each their own. Sorry dude. I still respect you as a writer but didn't click here.
Nigma, damn! That flow really went in dude! I was liking this for the most part on a technical standpoint. Really didn't think your storytelling was all that significant seeing as you hardly have depth from beginning to middle to end. But the wording and the rhyme scheme was great in my opinion. Especially that middle portion. There were a few lines here and there that kinda tripped off the scheme and sketched out the flow but you jumped right back in afterwards. Cool piece man.
Overall I have Nigma taking this battle, just enjoyed his more.
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