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Decibel · 08-11-2013, 02:43 AM

I throw shit at ya so quick, ya aint gonna see a catch like getting’ free shit!
pull S.D's card so hard he won’t remember me like removing a phone memory chip!
I liked the final punch but the setup was meh
Ya a scrub, so if this Chess imma King, and this faggot Pawn’s soft
So watch as I cut ‘shotgun in half’ like im fuckin’ sawn off!
Chess lines played all around. punch Im not really feeling
Ya know can’t see me since I’m out of ya sight like a star all day
Ya tryin to land shots, but a Shotgun can’t hit a target that’s far away
The wording here is ChOpPy. setup relates to punch and it was an okay jab at best
I leave no Dinero Left, like a bill from the hospital after getting’ ya skull broken, might
So, When I start pressin, ya fold quick so Dinero givin’ up like Poker Night!
using Dinero twice seems off to me. Good NP, and decent punch
Win? Creating an alias n’ voting for himself is the only way this Fake’ll grab it!
This dudes weak, I’m through with Gamble-quick like breaking a habit!
The whole Alias/voting for himself is over-done. Final punch was decent

Overall, your setups seem really filler or not related to the punch at all. Your wording was off in some parts (espicially that shotgun to far away) throughout verse. Your concepts are direct and used to the point where they will become played quickly. Personals are non-existant here it seems. Decent flow other than choppy wording. A pretty decent sub-par verse here

Ever since NC has been restored i been thinking, aint it a fact?...
That this guy was history w/ what Lama deleted - even God couldn't save u from that...
Good setup to a humorous impact.
In fact, just look... U could tell hes the type to go taddle....
Shit, it dont take much to see Ani lies in his raps - just read what he writes in a battle...
Setup was meh.. took a second for the WP.. it was alright for a punch
You could act wreckless all you want, but it wont stop the cancer from coming...
You could see from his handle on things he's no A.I, so i tell em like... An, sir... violence is NOT the answer you wantin'...
Not really feeling this to be honest
For your death you'll pay a large price, so they'll be a major cost involved...
Must not have your eye on the prize.. cuz we wont have to play golf to see - T off the ball...
Seen the whole Golf/T or T-Shirt coming out. Decent bar here..
I serve this bitch before I deliver the rest - this pest like home fries...
He's just an actor tryna rap - and one punch'll have Mos Def, from both sides...
Decent closer

You had a pretty decent verse here. Your concepts were more direct, complex, and creative than Animo's. The only miss was the 3rd bar from you where the others were fairly decent. Your wording was a little better than Animo's in my opinion, and you had a little funny opener to catch readers eye. You may need to work on flow as it was stretched some areas and stay away from the random misses.

Vote: Shogun

08-11-2013, 02:43 AM	#9
Decibel Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 269 Battle Record: 2-3 Rep Power: 0	I throw shit at ya so quick, ya aint gonna see a catch like getting’ free shit! pull S.D's card so hard he won’t remember me like removing a phone memory chip! I liked the final punch but the setup was meh Ya a scrub, so if this Chess imma King, and this faggot Pawn’s soft So watch as I cut ‘shotgun in half’ like im fuckin’ sawn off! Chess lines played all around. punch Im not really feeling Ya know can’t see me since I’m out of ya sight like a star all day Ya tryin to land shots, but a Shotgun can’t hit a target that’s far away The wording here is ChOpPy. setup relates to punch and it was an okay jab at best I leave no Dinero Left, like a bill from the hospital after getting’ ya skull broken, might So, When I start pressin, ya fold quick so Dinero givin’ up like Poker Night! using Dinero twice seems off to me. Good NP, and decent punch Win? Creating an alias n’ voting for himself is the only way this Fake’ll grab it! This dudes weak, I’m through with Gamble-quick like breaking a habit! The whole Alias/voting for himself is over-done. Final punch was decent Overall, your setups seem really filler or not related to the punch at all. Your wording was off in some parts (espicially that shotgun to far away) throughout verse. Your concepts are direct and used to the point where they will become played quickly. Personals are non-existant here it seems. Decent flow other than choppy wording. A pretty decent sub-par verse here Ever since NC has been restored i been thinking, aint it a fact?... That this guy was history w/ what Lama deleted - even God couldn't save u from that... Good setup to a humorous impact. In fact, just look... U could tell hes the type to go taddle.... Shit, it dont take much to see Ani lies in his raps - just read what he writes in a battle... Setup was meh.. took a second for the WP.. it was alright for a punch You could act wreckless all you want, but it wont stop the cancer from coming... You could see from his handle on things he's no A.I, so i tell em like... An, sir... violence is NOT the answer you wantin'... Not really feeling this to be honest For your death you'll pay a large price, so they'll be a major cost involved... Must not have your eye on the prize.. cuz we wont have to play golf to see - T off the ball... Seen the whole Golf/T or T-Shirt coming out. Decent bar here.. I serve this bitch before I deliver the rest - this pest like home fries... He's just an actor tryna rap - and one punch'll have Mos Def, from both sides... Decent closer You had a pretty decent verse here. Your concepts were more direct, complex, and creative than Animo's. The only miss was the 3rd bar from you where the others were fairly decent. Your wording was a little better than Animo's in my opinion, and you had a little funny opener to catch readers eye. You may need to work on flow as it was stretched some areas and stay away from the random misses. Vote: Shogun __________________ ..:: Decibel ::..