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Objective: You did a tremendous job of sounding provocative, which isn't an insult. In order to be provocative, you have to sound provocative. I didn't much care for the paragraph section, where you were a bit more basic and less provocative-sound. But I did like the traditional section. You didn't break any philosophical ground or anything, and I'm not sure your conclusion was entirely justified by the rest of your verse. And your rhyme schemes and mechanics in general definitely need to be touched up or, in spots, nearly completely overhauled. Particularly on an abstract verse like this, I'm looking for that extra layer of complexity across the board. But there were a lot of interesting thoughts and several strong word choices mixed into this verse. I enjoyed reading it. It made me think, even if it didn't make me realize anything in particular.

Nigma: I really liked this verse. There were a few forced rhymes, to be sure, but I got the picture you were going for of self-exploration and the conceited finish tied in well with what Lexicon seemed to be doing with his own verse. You were exploring how you ended up where you are. The flow and rhyme scheme were strong, and I didn't feel like you forced too heavily on the E-structure of the verse. I thought the second half of the stem was a little weaker, as you were bragging more, but again, I think Lexicon's verse was focused on personal identity. The stuff about your father and stepfather was interestingly (and well-) phrased. The one big criticism I have was the font. You should want people to notice your words more than your presentation, even when you're doing something structurally interesting like the E. The design of the verse would have come through just fine in the normal font.

Vote: Nigma