Genocide, not a huge fan of your writing style. It seems you think by using a bigger vocabulary and focusing on your rhyme scheme that you'll get the win. No. Maybe in audio, but not in a topical battle. It's about writing something to complete the Topic. You don't go in depth enough. Your imagery is lacking. There's no beginning, middle or end. It's just one big free verse and to people who haven't been doing Topicals that long -- it might get you a win. But to a topical vet that's been doing it since 2003. I gotta say you've got a lot to learn and improve on.
Tyson, your vocabulary could've been cleaner but I felt this was much more a topical than your opponent's. you had a storyline in some depth, had some solid imagery. I felt your rhyme scheme was simple, yet fluent and on point. Short and sweet to say the very least. I'd like to see a longer, more detailed topical from you and I'm sure I'll see it in the league. Keep at it.
Vote Tyson, overall better verse.
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