It's unfair to judge cathartic scribbles under the same scope you would a piece that's written purely for creations sake. There's cleverness in this writing. Mostly in the observations and the way you manipulate wording to fit the topic/steer direction. The only critique I'd offer is to say that what was lacking from this was perspective of the situation as a whole. It's not closed out. You give no discovery beyond misery and its hopelessness. As far as a journal type entry, who cares? It's mostly for you. My suggestion is purely from a readers standpoint. Fuck readers. They get what the writer gives.
Dope.
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