This was a solid take on a truly wretched challenge verse. The Damien theme wasn't original, but you brought it out OK because the pacing on your verse was solid. I think you could have leaned more on concrete, real-world imagery to solidify your characters. Also, your mechanics seem to come and go, from portions where your rhymes and flow are perfect to others where they seem secondary or even missing entirely. But this was a good verse. And it sprung from a really bad one.
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