Certain, not a bad take on the topic and you had a consistent flow to the verse throughout. You're firm grasp of assonance was complimented nicely with some scattered consonance/alliteration which is more garnish to the flow. Critique I had, look for some more unique rhyme schemes, maybe more unique wording in general. You through in 'postulates' which was an awesome word choice and fit with the multi. Unique wording catalyse unique rhyme schemes so trying to improve on the average level of language you are using is a good way to stay unique.
Mike, you went content over flow in this one but not in an awful way. Seemed to me like you did a lot of research and had a bunch of material picked out that you wanted to write about and kinda threw it all together, but the outcome really worked for me. Although I feel it the verse could have used several layers of polishing, the read really engaged me and I enjoyed the read.
Prognosis: Read through one verse without really gettin bored, and the other verse I was lookin forward to readin line after line. Contrary to my usual voting preferences, Certain had a well put together verse with a higher level of mechanics but I didn't give him my vote on this day. Mike, was interested in your content here, liked the verse, gold star.
+1 Mike Wrecka
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