/v certain serpent- some very proper assonance really gave him the edge, and the last line killed it. liked the sound of these bars in particular
And who is the victim? The usual prison of youth in the system.
We're abusing the visions of 2Pac and Cube, bruising their image.
you pretty much slaughtered it. i can't criticize this at all. very well spoken. nice drop.
mike wrecka- word choices were excellent. made some valid points and came through with an original take on the topic. nicely done. i had a slight problem with hungry/country.. if top of/third world matched up a little better it would'nt have bothered me. your point is definitely valid, but in my opinion it's up to the consumer to decide what they want to do with their body so the responsibility inevitably falls on them. but the piece is definitely informative and i bet you could have this included in some kind of regular health publication if you were to send it in to one.
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