This didn't feel so much like a complete thought as a photograph of your kitchen. The rhymes were good, but the line variation gave it a sort of awkward flow, where I was rushing some lines and slowing down on others. That might be intended, though.
There wasn't enough wit to make this funny, though the entire premise of starting and ending a verse while talking about your dog's feces was bizarre and comical. Some wordplay would have brought out the humor a lot more. That random existentialism in the middle of the verse was weird, too, again making it feel more like a cypher than a verse. But in that context, it was fun and interesting, a slice of the mind.
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I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.
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