The middle section, from Baraka through horse scheme, and the last line were fucking ridiculous. It took me a second to dig in. That's about all the concrete criticism I have. It's tough to start one of these types of rhyme-heavy swagger verses, though. They always seem to pick up steam as they go before eventually fading.
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I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.
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