[Objective]

First paragraph kinda starts off slow in terms of flow, I couldn't exactly grasp it that well and the rhymes was rather bland to me. But the choice of words and the intro to your piece is dope as fuck and the flow/scheme picks up towards the end of the first paragraph. The subject matter is interesting and I'm looking forward to read where you're going to take me with the universe as a HDD, galaxies as progs along with a bunch of other interesting concepts.

Also;
From it's source a given supply is distributed
^ITS source, not ''it's'' in this case.

Paragraph 2 - The jump from the concept to the earth/society was a huge leap for me as a reader. I didn't know wether you was still talking about the universe using metaphores or not to uncover a dope concept/thought etc., ya feel me? I know the closing couplet to the first paragraph might have been some kind of a transition as to close it up, but it wasn't obvious enough for me tbh and I had to re-read the second stanza to get what you were going at. But this is nitpicking though and probably just me, definitely enjoying what I'm reading so far.

Paragraph 3 - Now, this is kinda what I talked about in paragraph 2, here you present your idea/what you're going to talk about clearly to your reader in the start.

Remember when we feared the worst and some were giving up
Waiting for Y2K crashes as time brought the millennium
^ Lmfao, indeed. Enjoy the shit you're saying, hate the execution of it. No rhymes or anything to help the flow or whatever so it comes across to me as ''lazy'', ya know? Either way, digging the shit you're saying, but don't forget the rhymes. Policy/Obsolete is also kinda lazy. Enjoyed the paragraph a lot for the most part tho'.

The last paragraph was dope, but I felt it sidetracked a bit from the first paragraph tbh. You talked about advanced thinking and somethingsomething as the universe being the hard drive etc. I don't see how that correlates with this section of your piece? Perhaps that is your point tho', to pick apart existence and talk about the truth how you see it along with some shit about how fucked up the world is with its skewed pharmaceuticals.

Word at the shit you were saying tho' and I agree with your viewpoints, some thought provoking shit in there as well. Don't know why this is getting slept on. Definitely a dope piece. Looking forward to read more from you.