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Old 08-06-2013, 02:09 AM   #7
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Originally Posted by YDK View Post
Any vet feed?
I'm only a Junior Member but I'll feed you none-the-less... been a year since I've read anything of yours and I see you aint changed much... a little bit more twisted though... loved the flow, but thought the subject matter was kind of cliche... but I really liked the beginning:
"Paraphrasing a paradox,
subliminal signals hidden by parental locks."

those lines really grabbed me, I was like... wow! nice.

The rest, though nice in the flow department kinda struck me as mediocre in the imagery and execution.... started with a bang, but kinda ended with a whimper... but still pretty fun to read :)
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