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Old 08-06-2013, 02:00 AM   #9
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Takin 5 syllables at the end of one line and adding them to the next line does nothing but help aid the reader. if it flows it flows, line length wasnt an issue to me at all. this was dope neigh, intro was acceptable, coulda offered a little more pow, verse picked up soon after and was strongly consistent, lines black quoted were my fav, although i see a lot of street fighter based lines in these type of pieces the 'boss stage finisher' was a nice play. horrorcore rapscene/martin scorsese was a loose rhyme even for just an assonance rhyme but was a dope concept. finisher was tight too, good verse. would love to collab some time
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