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Old 02-03-2013, 12:20 PM   #12
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the skyrim references were what actually drew me in.. how fuckin nerdy is that

Absorbing the blackness of magic too pure to imagine

i was just reading on in dark matter, and how much of our universe really consists of this substance that we simply cannot seem to detect. and this was reminiscent of that idea even though I'm sure you had no intention of that.

Attack filling corner to corner with lava, straight Mordor the planet

ha

Typin lines that form into gashes like backs hit with 400 lashes
My minds a sword or an axe in the hands of a Nord as he crashes to war
In the battle, I'm thwarting your plans using Morrowind tactics

i feel like this is where you hit a peak. you were pretty consistent regardless but you kinda broke the reigns with these. had me pretty hype man. and, like i said, the elder scrolls references gave me a new sort of viewpoint on the verse. i just started the game so thats probably why.

I'm still ill as cursed plague, you pricks as sick as a cure for AIDs

idk why but this was dope to me. it was, and i say this honestly, a flip on the oldest punchline in the book that I've never seen before. so kudos.

i like how you ended this up too. like it was a fleeting moment in which this lightning struck you.

cool man. thanks for this, I've read the pieces you've dropped thus far but never had the chance to drop a thought or two on them. enjoying what you're putting out there.

keep on.

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