Objective, blah blah big ass picture debate n shit. I feel theres no harm in using a pic, but theres a right and a wrong way to do it. Lookin at Pancakes verse for example, he had an eloquent verse that was complimented by the picture and it was unclear if he found the pic before or after writing his verse. In this case, its pretty apparent you found this pic, a funny one at that, and decided to not only base your verse on it, but also presented it in a way that incorporated it into the verse itself. I don't think its a huuuuge issue but felt like you relied too much on the pic being that this is a writers challenge league.
As far as the content is concerned the verse wasn't bad. I feel there is room for improvement in your flow and scheme complexity however it wasn't a drawback. You progressed the story nicely and said ereything you wanted to say.
Boredom, this was another side of you that surprised me in a good way. My biggest concern about past topical pieces was how you formatted things in a setup/punch battle kinda thing but I don't see that here. Flow was on point and you had plenty of nice assonance that gives it the extra zing. Opener was fire a high expectation for the verse which you lived up to for the most part. There were some typos and random grammatical errors spread throughout which leads me to believe you kinda rushed this or just didn't have time to proofread but I felt the verse as a whole came together decently
Prognosis: Neither really dove too deep in terms of concepts or critical thinking so I felt like both verses could have used a bit more depth. Pretty close in terms of content so my vote was decided by the technicalities and mechanics of the writing. Objective came solid but I feel Bore was a bit stronger in that area which some nice schemes and effective use of assonance. Good read from both
+1 Boredom
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