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Certain · 08-04-2013, 02:43 PM

@Adonis, there were three characters in the verse: Mary, Jason and the narrator, who was the Mennonite on rumspringa. I used first person throughout every section. In that final one, Jason helped the narrator leave Philadelphia and go back to Mary and the Mennonite community.

I'll work on being clearer, though. Thanks for the feedback.

08-04-2013, 02:43 PM	#337
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	@Adonis, there were three characters in the verse: Mary, Jason and the narrator, who was the Mennonite on rumspringa. I used first person throughout every section. In that final one, Jason helped the narrator leave Philadelphia and go back to Mary and the Mennonite community. I'll work on being clearer, though. Thanks for the feedback. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws. Last edited by Certain; 08-04-2013 at 02:51 PM.