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Originally Posted by Certain Serpent
Definitely, @ Rawn M.D..
Now that it's over, and I ask this as a learning experience, @ Adonis and @ Coup, could you explain what you meant by saying the narrator changed in my verse? It was unintentional, and I'd like to know whether my wording was too vague in certain parts. I have a tendency to underwrite, part of my profession (journalism). |
Verse was as follows...
Mary, jason, Mary Jason. You mentioned the characters by name. Then the final stanza it became...
"Jason, as he helped
Me"
in that final stanza you were vague, but you lead us to beleive though out the verse you were speaking in narrative, then out of no where you threw in first person I.e me and my black hat. You never said out right you became Mary, but in 5 stanza's you used one tense, then in 1 stanza a completely different tense