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Originally Posted by Patrown

if you want some pointers on condensing phrases holla at me. but u comin clean.

Word, I welcome anything I can improve from. Specially in terms of grammar etc. If anyone see anything I'd love for y'all to point it out and quote whatever lines got bad grammar in them.

Also @Certain Serpent, word at everything you said in your vote. Thought it was a rather hard topic to write to, but I definitely see your points about explaining why he's pissed etc. Another story to back it up or something. I'll try to make up for it in my next verse.