Flo, crazy storytelling bro for real. I enjoyed it because it was a believable argument and it was difficult to discern which side you were actually apart of, a question that only deepened with the way you chose to end the verse. In the beginning, the constant back and forths grew incongruent by the constant breaks of Him:/Me:. This was made bearable as soon as each character started to develop their arguments. You held a slight lead in this battle in regards to flow, felt yours read more naturally. Was really feelin the verse. Haven't read a lot from you but this one was memorable.
Adonis, loved the subject matter here. Few people take the time to learn anything about that sort of stuff but it's honestly interested. I loved your description and imagery line for line, I found it was very nicely done in the intro especially. Loved how vastly you explored the direction you chose, really covered a lot of different subject matter. I kind of wish you would have shortened the first portion and focussed more on developing the character from the near future. Felt Flo had a more natural readability but that was just comparing the two, yours didn't take away from the verse. Very solid read, like your opponents I was really digging the verse.
Prognosis: Flo takes my vote. Although I was really drawn to Adonis verse I feel he needed to do more to top excellent display of storytelling from Flo. More rounded verse overall although both had a nice spin of the topic. Was a good battle to read
+1 Flo Real
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