[Mike Wrecka]

cool battle.

enigma = good verse. first thing I took from it was that it didn't flow as good as your usual stuff and lacked the multis you usually use. id say this verse was kinda rushed. if it wasn't well my bad. with that aside there was a lot to like about this verse. your end rhymes were strong.

Holy masks with soul entrapment, honed and cast with totem magic


really liked that line. overall told a nice overview of a dogon priest , medicine man. good work. a good solid verse, not great but still strong.

plot- I really liked the flow, cadence and structure of that first paragraph. it fell off from there a bit. some of your end rhymes I thought were questionable. not sure where you are from but some didn't work with my accent. like Egypt and hieroglyphics . they don't really rhyme and this took away from your piece. your verse felt like an introduction. just when some action is about to happen you stopped it though. I wish you would have went like forty more lines or so describing the murderous beast and what happens. you ended it as a to be continued which didn't work for me. good verse non the less and I did enjoy what was there but it felt incomplete.

good battle guys. two good verses thanks for the reads

vote- nIGMA