cakecakecake, nice verse sir. I got bitched at by Frank and his alias in the writers league for using pics in battles but no one here seems to mind, I might start doin it again. The visual impression gives the read that extra little bit imo. Very solid execution of the short bar format. You set a high level of expectations for the teller of tales.
Storyteller, I enjoyed the content of your verse, but I wasn't a huge fan of how you went about presenting them to the reader. I agree with what Zygote was trying to describe. something about the general tone just didn't grip me as an engaging vibe. Despite criticism it wasn't a bad verse, just didn't match up well against the refined technicality of the brah.
+1 Aunt Jemima
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